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Fresh Air and Lights by ~thephoenix131:iconthephoenix131:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Urban > Open


I take a walk outside for a breath of fresh air
Breathe in deeply and my lungs shrivel with the black oily scent
Chariots of metal pass me on the road we share
The horsepower of four motorized wheels grind
A squealing whinny adds burnt tire to the noxious cocktail of fumes
Pervading the atmosphere in which our sun sets
A sickly yellow fire on the horizon

Night leaves the starry sky a dull black
A shadow of the world below
Where I'm lit by electric guiding stars
Outshining those above
Showing the way home
To my box of artificially cooled air and instant light

My natural environment
©2009 ~thephoenix131
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Author's Comments

Plz to not make fun of title.

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Thought of this while on a walk today.

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~thenobleart Apr 15, 2009, 3:02:59 AM
The 'sickly yellow sun' is a brilliant phrase. How insightful.
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~ThatDeznaGuy Apr 15, 2009, 6:44:25 AM
Very nice!! Picturesque :XD:

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~thephoenix131 Apr 15, 2009, 7:51:48 PM
thanks ^^

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The atom bombs are piling up in the factories, the police are prowling through the cities, the lies are streaming from the loudspeakers, but the earth is still going round the sun.
George Orwell
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~thephoenix131 Apr 15, 2009, 7:52:54 PM
hehe, thanks ^^ i remember, occasionally, coming home from somewhere or other, near about suncorp stadium, i think, the land was fairly flattish or something, and i could see on the horizon, as the sun was close to setting, that kind green/yellow haze from pollution. thus my inspiration for that phrase

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The atom bombs are piling up in the factories, the police are prowling through the cities, the lies are streaming from the loudspeakers, but the earth is still going round the sun.
George Orwell
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~crazed-photographer Apr 15, 2009, 10:02:57 PM
Very evocative and ironic.

I love it, you should write MOAR.

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"All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given us." Gandalf the Grey
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~thephoenix131 Apr 16, 2009, 3:41:09 AM
i would say rather more sarcastic than ironic :P

if i come upon any further inspiration, i shall :P

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The atom bombs are piling up in the factories, the police are prowling through the cities, the lies are streaming from the loudspeakers, but the earth is still going round the sun.
George Orwell
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~crazed-photographer Apr 16, 2009, 4:13:38 AM
You better: I love your writing.

I dunno - it seems ironic to me.

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"All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given us." Gandalf the Grey
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~thephoenix131 Apr 16, 2009, 2:57:51 PM
hehe, thank you! and thank you for the fave :D

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The atom bombs are piling up in the factories, the police are prowling through the cities, the lies are streaming from the loudspeakers, but the earth is still going round the sun.
George Orwell
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~crazed-photographer Apr 16, 2009, 7:13:29 PM
You are welcome.

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"All we have to decide is what to do with the time that is given us." Gandalf the Grey
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